We're so close to end, so let's all finish strong!
For this review, I'll be looking at Diego Alcantara's production report 14b for one of his essay's body sections. My comments for him can be found here.
An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed
So I'm going to be reviewing Diego's essay fragment and making some suggestions about the content which he can add to this section to improve it.
An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback
I think that Diego has a really good start with this section of his piece, but it could be improved by adding in more concrete examples of how his research has improved since he started, including research reports and the interviews we conducted.
An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings (or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback
When looking at the other essays it is clear that there is often a lot of evidence presented to the reader, which Diego is lacking right now, so I suggested he add some so that he can improve his piece.
One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from
I like how he compares his writing experience before this class to what he's doing now and shows how he's "evolved" to where he is now.
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