Sunday, February 21, 2016

Local Revision: Variety

It's almost time to submit the draft, so what's still left to revise?


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1. How much variation is there in your sentence structures in the current draft? Can you spot any repetitive or redundant sentence patterns in your writing? Provide a cogent analysis of what the Rules for Writers reading tells you about your sentences.

When reading through my draft, I realize that the vast majority of my sentences are long and complex, with very few sentences that are short enough to break the rhythm. Without this, the paragraphs seem incredibly long and drawn out, a feature which readers will not enjoy.

2. What about paragraph structures, including transitions between different paragraphs (or, for video/audio projects, different sections of the project)? 

For the most part, to transition between the different topics I use different sub-headings, which may not be the best option. I believe the draft would be more effective if there were transitions between the sections rather than just moving on to a new topic.

3. What about vocabulary? Is there variety and flavor in your use of vocabulary? What are the main strengths and weaknesses of the draft's approach to vocabulary?

Overall, I believe that the vocabulary used in my draft is somewhat varied, but could definitely use improvement to ensure that the words that are consistently repeated within the draft are kept to a minimum. Also, it is important to keep the technical vocabulary to a minimum so that the reader is comfortable understanding the guide with little difficulty.

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