Key information about your particular project that you would like anyone who peer reviews your draft to know
It was hard to introduce this topic without any bias due to its very complicated political nature and the ways in which people already have their opinions, so please let me know if you feel that I'm biased.
Major issues or weaknesses in the “Rough Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those weaknesses)
I know that the graphical cuts may be a bit crude, especially at the end, but I'm working on finding some better ones as well as more videos rather than pictures.
Major virtues or strengths in the “Rough Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those strengths)
I think that I do a pretty good job of showing the viewer how Awlaki's actions over the course of the past decade have caused this controversy, and hope that it shows in what I've produced so far.
The video of Anwar Al-Alaki at the beginning of the video was a fantastic choice. Personally, I would shorten the clip because it only strongly holds audience attention for the first fifteen seconds or so. What can I say? I'm a millennial. Besides, the stretch between 0:14 and the end of the clip is repetitive.
ReplyDeleteI would recommend redoing the voiceover with a higher quality microphone. The poor quality is an unnecessary distraction. Great microphones can be checked out at the Gear to Go center here. If you decide to record the voiceover again, I would look up videos for the accurate pronunciation of Al Qaeda and al-Awlaki. This is a personal pet peeve, but I'm sure most of your audience doesn't speak Arabic.
This is a good start! The main form issue is the voiceover quality, which can easily be redone.
Hey Coby,
ReplyDeleteYour video essay looks pretty good so far. I think how you integrated video cuts from Anwar himself really makes your project more interesting and entertaining. I'd also suggest maybe re-recording your voice with maybe a digital recorder since I couldn't understand you at some points. Also, make sure to include some sort of title slide or phrase in letters to make sure thaudince knows what your video is about! Besides that, your draft is looking great! good luck with finishing it :)
Cheyenne