Key information about your particular project that you would like anyone who peer reviews your draft to know
I think it's important to say that working on a video was definitely the hardest of the three projects so far, but I hope that I've presented all of my information well.
Major issues or weaknesses in the “Fine Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those weaknesses)
There's a few places where I wanted to have video rather than just pictures, but in many places it's just hard to find that kind of footage.
Major virtues or strengths in the “Fine Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those strengths)
I really like the way that I've laid out all of my information, and think that by presenting the facts of the case, I was able to make a compelling argument in favor of Awlaki's death.
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ReplyDeleteGreat Video, and great topic. I like the lay out that you have and your introduction hooked me on right of the back.
That being said, I think that somewhere in your introduction, you should more explicitly state your stance on the controversy at hand. You stated something of the sorts, but it stills seems like at this point, you stance can go one way or another. Tell your audience what they are getting into. It helps better explain what all your evidence is for plus it also grabs more of their attention.
Another edit you should should is the way in which you cite the videos that you used. You can do rolling credits at the end, add captions when you play them, or maybe both.
Good luck on your project and I hope this helps!
Hey Coby! I really enjoyed how professional your project was! I decided to review your project for 're-design', and at first that probably sounds scary, especially at this point in our project progress, but it really isn't, I don't have much to comment on; it's just that what I do have to comment on fits into this category.
ReplyDeleteOkay so the only thing that really stuck out to me was the lack of credit you had at the end as far as if I had wanted to fact check, yada yada yada, you might want to thing about just including your sources at the end and not just referencing them in the video.
I think this genre is so open and not very strict that everything else you had was exactly to the genre. I mean I showed myself talking to the camera and that is in the genre, and you did not show yourself talking to the camera yet that is also in the genre; so I would say you came out quite well.
If I were to comment on anything else, I would suggest making your title a little more concise and easy to remember. The keywords I got were Anwar al-Awlaki and something about death, so I would say if you want your viewer to really remember the title (and thus share it) you could make the title shorter.
But again, very very well done!